hi! i wrote a short story when i was in third grade based off these pictures that some guy wrote to go with short stories.
i wrote one from the drawing mr lindin's library. here is th pic, caption, and title: (Pics at bottom of post)
Mr. Linden's Library
He had warned her about the book.
Now it was too late.
i am re-writing it, and here is the first part
Amelia always loved horror stories. But this one was too much, too real. She never should have gone in to that library. She never should have stolen that book. It was the worst mistake of her life. Luckily, she made it out alive, just barely.
what do you guy think? If you give me a bad comment, that's fine, just give me a reason why you don't like any part of it.
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I agree w/ Bobularia. You should lead the reader into the 1st chapter or so of the book and then say "Luckily, she made it out alive, just barely." Then it creates some suspense (a truckload of suspense) and brings the reader into the story.
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