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post #101 of 111 (permalink) Old 07-21-2011, 11:01 AM
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Did he drop off the face of the planet (agian)? More Please

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post #102 of 111 (permalink) Old 07-21-2011, 11:07 AM
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Pm him, ask him to come back... Pm messages go into the email...

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I left a message on his visitor page.

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post #104 of 111 (permalink) Old 07-21-2011, 11:19 AM
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That won't go to his email Pm

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We should all do that. Maybe I'll write my own.... Hmm....

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I'm continuing Nutts noble work:

Next chapter: (ignore the *)


Story

I sighed. I was back in this place.
** *I heard a shout behind me,"Yo! Red dude! Stop swimming in circles!" His shout made me realize I WAS swimming in circles. I hadn't realized because my tail was a stub. I stopped and flared at the fish behind me. I stopped mid-flare. He was a huge blue king betta.*

** "What are you starin' at?" He was fully flared, and twice my size.*

** "Um...er...noth-" he cut me off.

** "What happened to your tail boy?"*

** "Tail biting," I said looking down.
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** "A crowntail like you tail biting? That's pathetic! Where were you before you got to this hell hole?"

** " Um...I was at...-" he cut me off again.
*
** "Cat got your tongue? Out with it!"

** "I was at a worse hell hole than this!" I shouted at him. He was driving me insane. " If you were there you wouldnt even have that nub of a tail you have now!"

He smiled. "What's your name, son?" He was much more mellow now.

I sighed,"Zach. Do you have bipolar disorder or something?"

"No," he said snickering.*

"He does that to everyone." said a shy, female voice.

*On my right was the most beautiful crowntail female I've ever seen. If I wasn't so red to begin with I would be now. She smiled, instantly causing my heart to flutter.

"Wha-what do you mean?" I stuttered, trying to regain my composure.*

She smiled again and rolled her eyes, " I mean he likes to scare the new fish. Teach 'em who's boss."

"Yeah well I still don't know who it is..." I murmured. I let my tail, or what's left of it, drag on the bottom as I slowly swam around my cup. *I was once again staring at the Fluval Edge right across from me. I noticed a sticker under it. It said 120.00. Something small and cylindrical was on the shelf under it, it was a bowl, like what the girl used to use to eat something called "cereals", except clear. I saw a picture of a betta like me on it. The sticker under that said 9.99. *Shock came over me. I realized the Fluval was 120 dollars. A Human method of trading paper for objects. The bowl was 9 dollars. More people were going to buy the bowl.*

Because I *was lost in my*cognizance, I didn't notice a small human run up and press her face against my cup. She was the same size as the other little girl, but seemed very gentle. She picked my cup very gently and looked at me. She shook her head in disgust. A larger lady came up behind her and said, "he looks ugly, do you want him?"*

She said," No of course not. I just can't believe someone would hurt him." Her eyes lit up when she saw another betta on the shelf. She put me down and picked up a orange veiltail and turned her back to the betta shelf. She bent down and picked up a 9 dollar bowl. The girl turned to her mom and said,"okay, let's go!"*

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Sorry I thought I replied. It's good! What's with all the ****** though?

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I don't know, it must've happened when I copied it from my iPads notes app to the forum? I typed it on my the 'Notes' app.

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Ahhh... Hmmmm...

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post #110 of 111 (permalink) Old 07-24-2011, 03:28 PM
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Very good story, jumps around a lot, I bet the story would go faster, and be easier, if every member had a chance to write a part (each person gets assigned to take a turn every week or something)
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