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Old 08-06-2013, 06:57 PM   #1 
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Red face Poem I wrote

So I wrote a poem about the dude who gives me fish for $1.99 (cheaper than anywhere else) and who is quite attractive but also quite too old (by 12 years) but yes. I thought I'd just share because I'm quite proud of it. I hope the metaphor is understandable.

Just a touch of poison
To get me through the day.
Invading my body
With warmth and desire.
It's so hard to resist
An addiction it's become.
I walk in with my head low
Praying not to be noticed.
Until I reach the back
Where my poison is stored.
My heart races a mile a minute
There isn't enough air in the room.
Try to focus on everything
Besides my enslaving friend.
Remember, I tell myself,
Just a touch.
I saunter towards my poison
Moving nonchalantly
Though inside feels otherwise.
His piercing blue eyes meet mine
And his voice booms,
"Hey there, sweetheart"
I begin to lose control
Quickly becoming light headed.
I whisper an innocent '"hi"
And close in on him.
He doesn't back away
As my hand touches his side.
So close is my poison
I can taste it on my tongue.
His eyes draw me in closer
Like a moth to a light..
I cannot resist
Drinking the whole bottle.
Just a touch isn't enough
But for now it must be
Because a passion like this
Must take time to age.
So for now I must only have
Just a touch of poison.

I hope you liked it. It seems really dorky reading it back but..yeah, I don't know.
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Old 08-06-2013, 07:00 PM   #2 
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Wow. That was....DEEP. But quite interesting! Good work!
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Old 08-07-2013, 12:46 AM   #3 
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Very nice and not dorky at all!
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Old 08-07-2013, 09:51 AM   #4 
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Thank you :)
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Old 08-10-2013, 08:38 AM   #5 
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Don't ever think What comes from the heart is dorky!great work!
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Old 08-12-2013, 09:39 PM   #6 
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Very nice poem; I can relate to it somewhat. Darn college girls always look so young...
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