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Old 06-25-2011, 02:29 PM   #1 
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Talking Betta Story

Hi, I'm trying to make a betta story, here is the first part...
BTW my teacher says I'm an excellent writer, is it true~?




The Beautiful Betta
A Story
By Emma Dahl



Isn't He Beautiful? A kind voice cooed. Another voice came, strong, but kind. "Yes our son is very beautiful indeed!"
these voices came from my two parents, Trinity and Dagger.
i was only a small fry, but i got to stay with my parents, for i was a late hatch, but i was one of the 20 who survived the spawning, most of my brothers and sisters died before i was brung into the world.

what do you think, should i continue?
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Old 06-25-2011, 04:27 PM   #2 
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It's good... Brought not Brung
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Old 06-26-2011, 08:43 PM   #3 
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sorry, i forgot the word that would replace it :P but i'm wondering if i should continue
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Old 06-26-2011, 08:48 PM   #4 
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Location: Canada, eh?
Yes, definitely continue! :D

Don't forget to capitalize your I's and put quotation marks around what everyone's saying. :P

(Please ignore my inner grammar nerd. XD)
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Old 07-01-2011, 04:09 PM   #5 
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I'd say finish up learning grammar and spelling first, then continue. :0 It makes it easier to organize your thoughts and easier for other people to read it.
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Old 07-12-2011, 11:39 AM   #6 
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I know proper grammar, but I'm still only 10! remember??? XD
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Old 07-12-2011, 11:40 AM   #7 
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anyway, sorry I couldn't write, so much vacations~! O.O
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Old 07-17-2011, 10:27 AM   #8 
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That's okay :) But if you enjoy writing, grammar is an essential part. It's not hard, though. Very easy to learn! :)
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