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Old 10-11-2011, 04:28 PM   #1 
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Marki's Adventure (continued)

Hello Members of Bettafish.com!

I am BettaLover2033 and here i am going to share a beautiful story about two bettas that i had once before and im just going to add in a few details along the way of the story. I wrote this story myself last year and got caught up with everything else and just didnt get around to finishing it. So here i am trying to finish this story.

NEW MEMBERS (Note): I'm sure not many of you have been seen this story nor have you read it. I had people asking me to hurry and continue writing, but first i want your opinion.

FAMILIAR MEMBERS (Note): Some of you know this story and what its about and pleaded me to continue, so i am and i just want you to know that.

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~Marki's Adventure~

(Chapter 1)

It was a warm sunny day when i awoke from my night time sleep. As i looked up to get a gulp of air and seen a bright beam that made my entire home brighten up, as usual. I was just swimming around in my home inspecting as i usually do. "Nope." I thought to myself. "There is no one here in my home, and that’s the way i like it!" I said all cocky like. I waited for my Jesse to feed me. At least that’s what her mom calls her so i guess she is my Jesse.

As i was waiting, i started to day dream about when i was back in Thailand. "I would do anything to be back in my old real home back in the Thialand Pond." I thought. I remembered when i was just a tiny fry that just wanted to be out of the nest, but dad always said to stay in the nest. "Well look at me now dad I’m bigger and stronger than you have ever been!" I yelled loudly. As i yelled i noticed that there was no one i could be yelling at.

As i hear a loud squeak, I just knew that someone opened the door too wide again. "JESSE!" i thought. Now i can finally stop waiting and eat. "Please hurry up Jesse I’m starving." I begged. Finally Jesse walked through the door. I was so excited to see her i jumped up out of the water and tried to Give her a kiss, but instead i clonked my head up on the cover with the bright beam on it. "Oh settle down why dontcha." She said smiling and happily like always. "Oh Jesse i missed you so much." I said. "Oh i see what you’re looking at and wanting." You want your food huh?" She asked. As soon as she dropped my food in my home i raced up and ate the pellet while it was still crunchy.

"Hey Marki, guess what i picked up on the way home little buddy." She said grinning. "Uh oh what is it now, and I’m not little, I’m big and strong." I said in a frustrated tone. I looked closely and hard as she was coming up to me with a white and loud barrier. I went closer down to the graveled bottom and seen what she pulled out. "No way, it can’t be, it better NOT be." I said nervously. "Oh no it’s another betta." I cried. "Wait a minute, it’s not a male?" “It’s not a male!" Finally i got a good look at her and was just stunned by the pure white color she had. I flared at her and was dancing for a little rubbing up against the glass. She looked at me and flared right back at me with a mean look. Then i flared back to show her who is boss and she flared back, but this time it was a little more calming and cute.

"Wow you guys are so cute and would make some cute fry." I looked at my Jesse and thought, "maybe." "Okay now you two no more flaring for today." She said calmly. As the day passed i could not stop thinking about that beautiful girl. All afternoon and night i was still thinking about her pure white fins that made her bowl look so lit up. I kept thinking “she looks so amazing." "I never knew a fish could be so amazing." He thought.

As the bright morning sun peeked in and the bright beam lit up, like every morning. So i just laid there on my betta hammock that my wonderful Jesse got me a little while back. "I never noticed how cozy this hammock was." "Well that is not the issue right now. “I thought to myself. "I wondered if she was thinking of me as much as i am thinking of her." "Maybe i should stop wondering and just go find out, after all her tank is right next to mine."
"Hello Marki, how are you today buddy?" Jesse asked. "I wonder how you would like some bloodworms." "Oh really, i get to have some today YAY!" As she put the bloodworms into my tank i darted up to get each and every last piece. My Jesse brought me that amazing girl closer and closer to my tank. I was so excited to see her again i raced down to the bottom and just stared at her. Well i know that staring is rude but how could you not stare at her beautiful fins swishing back and forth in the water and watching her swim around so gracefully. "Okay now what should i name you?" Jesse asked. "What about Angel?" She wondered. "Well you sure do look like an Angel and it fits you perfectly!" I said out loud. "What did you say?" She asked. "Wait a minute how in the world did she hear what i said?" I asked myself. "Oh i said that out loud didn’t i?" "Yes you did." I flared and was displaying to her everything that i had and as wide as i could. Then i raced up to the top of the tank and took a quick gulp of air. While i was up there, i thought of something. "I know what will make her like me even more!" "I should make her a bubblenest and maybe then she would finally like me as i like her.
So that night i worked so hard to make the biggest bubblenest i could. By the time the sun started going down and the sun started to rise, i was so exhausted i swam slowly half asleep to my hammock and laid there and quickly fell asleep.

The next day as my Jesse came over to my tank to feed me a pellet, she opened the top and just stayed there with her eyes VERY wide open looking at my bubblenest. I swam out of my betta hammock yawning and stretching to see my Jesse with the lid open and her giant head above my water. At first, i thought she was going to touch it so i quickly swam under it and stayed there with a protective stare at her. "Jesse i worked so hard on this so please don’t touch!" I told her. "Whoa Marki did you make that bubble nest?" She asked rhetorically. "Yes i did and i can’t wait till Angel sees it!" I said proudly. So Jesse was still stunned as she was feeding me and went over to Angel's tank and started to smile so excited and nice. Thoughts went through my mind and all i could say was, "Uh oh!"

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Old 10-16-2011, 08:49 AM   #2 
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Nice story. I really like it, and I can't wait for chapter 2
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Old 10-16-2011, 07:53 PM   #3 
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Make sure you share it, so we can get some more followers. =)

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Old 10-17-2011, 06:31 PM   #4 
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Oh, this is so cute! Now I'm thinking about stories about my bettas!
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Old 10-18-2011, 01:14 AM   #5 
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i knew everyone can relate! Ill finish typing the second chapter this weekend!

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Old 10-30-2011, 08:07 AM   #6 
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Where is chapter 2??
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Old 11-01-2011, 05:30 PM   #7 
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Well Guys im really sorry about not being able to finish the second chapter last weekend. I just moved back to NY this week and didnt get internet until today. Sorry.

And im actually working on the second paragraph of the Second Chapter RIGHT NOW! Again sorry. And this chapter might be better than the first. Let me know. Also, it has a little humor in it. I think you guys (and gals) will enjoy the fun of it! Stay tuned. I should be done by either in a couple more hours (to get some good fun, comedy, and interest) or by late tonight. Depends on how things go.

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Old 11-01-2011, 10:21 PM   #8 
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Pretty cool story so far. can't wait for the next chapter
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Old 11-02-2011, 12:17 AM   #9 
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Very nice! Great job!
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Old 11-02-2011, 10:07 PM   #10 
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(Chapter 2)

Surprisingly, I couldn’t sleep that night. I have never felt this way about any betta. This feeling is just so confusing. I like Angel a lot! She is my… I don’t know a word for this amazing feeling! I wish I could explain it, but I can’t. What is wrong with me? Why is this happening? Is this real life? Okay now… Okay now I… I have 2 flippers… I can’t see anything, but her in my mind. Is this what a female does to you? Does she have control over me? All of those questions just ponder my mind. Mocking me! I have something inside of me saying that I NEED to see her, then there’s something that says just stay away she’s trouble. I think it’s the fact that she is a female and has the nerve actually to flare back at me! “Why does she feel that she is more dominant over me? Doesn’t she know who I am? The Great Marki of Jessie’s room, that’s who I am.” I said aloud. And yes, again I found that I was talking to myself. “Let me just take a breather for a second. It’ll all pass over. I’m sure I have nothing to worry about.”

I woke up from the sun BEAMING in my tank. Hey and I finally overheard my wonderful Jessie talking to the plastic banana and said that she was going to set up another “Tank”. Well whatever they call is what I’m going to call it. And about the plastic banana, don’t even ask. I don’t understand why it isn’t yellow like the ones I have seen. Plus what’s the point of putting numbers on it? That will ruin it! Well whatever it means to make a “call” I don’t really care, It is just impossible to think of anything else without thinking of Angel. “Well I need to stay focused.” I thought to myself. My bubblenest is falling apart. I notice that every time I blow a couple of bubbles, a portion starts to pop about every thirty minutes. It really is hard work to keep this up. I tried to stay focused on the nest but I can’t stop thinking of her magnificent fins flowing as she glides through the water with such grace and beauty.

Then I seen two other tanks that were set up to my left and then to my right. On the left side I was immediately distracted by THE most beautiful creatures my eyes have ever laid on. I quickly swam over to Angel and once I finally got there Angel swam at me with malignant eyes and as soon as she got to the very end of the tank where I was, she looked like she wanted to get a chance and tear me apart. Though I know that, that could never happen for I am the Great Marki, of my Jessie’s room! “Why am I in love with someone who wants me belly up? I thought to myself. Finally after flaring for about a second or two, I turned to my ‘good side’ and stretched my fins as wide as I could have. It’s hard work to really keep your body in a certain position just to woo someone you have such strong feelings for. When I displayed the widest spread I could, I could see her dark eyes lightening up as the Angel I know she is. She honestly looks like she’s been through so much but I know so little. When she lightened up and started retracting the extended gills under her mouth, I thought she had just the most beautiful innocent face. Then all of a sudden an abashed look appeared on her pale face.

“What’s your problem?” She said. “What’s my problem, don’t try and turn this around on me! What’s your problem? Why do you have such an ugly attitude? You dare flare at me FEMALE? I said with an agitated tone. “Well while you’ve been in here playing a pompous prince, I’ve been thrown into jars after jars and shaken by these giant horrifying beasts! You try living in a bowl for a month, two weeks, three days, three hours and fifty five minutes! Yes I was counting for all that time. I’m sick of being shy and sick of being told that I’m just a ‘FEMALE’. I mean c’mon we are both no better than the other. So get over yourself! You have no right to belittle any female nor do you have the power to make them feel unimportant!” I’m Just aggravated with your perspective as a dominant male, no…every males dominant attitude!” She replied stubbornly. “I still believe that you need to watch what you say and how you are in the presence of a ‘pompous prince’. I was just hoping to get your approval of myself and didn’t expect to get a response like that. You know every ‘MALE’ isn’t the way you think we are.” I said with an understanding but firm voice.

She looked at me waiting to for me to go on about how I was admiring her. I could see that she knew I was fancying her. I knew that she was liked me as well, at least a little.

“Well I’m guessing that we are going to have to think of a way to get along because you’re right next to me and I don’t know what is going on in the tank beside me on my right. Its only half way full and I just can’t see anything besides plants; I won’t be going into that tank so I’m not going to worry. I told her confidently.
She and I looked back at each other for a quick moment, then turned away stubbornly to try and work out the problem. When I got to my hammock, I found myself thinking of how that first impression went in her opinion. I still feel this tremendous like for her, but it isn’t a like at all, it’s unexplainable and has no word that I know of. It’s a lot more than like.
“I need to see her again and apologize, but wait why would I need to apologize? She is the one that was completely out of line and needs to know her place. What if we never talk again? She is going to hate me for the rest of her life. Though she should be the one to apologize so I’m not going to apologize nor am I going to summon her.” All of these thoughts are making me feel so vulnerable but I don’t want her to hate me. I wish she could have the same feelings toward me as I have for her! Why is this so complicated?

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Let me know your feelings about this and make some predictions of what you believe will happen next? Also Again sorry for it being so late. I didnt have any internet until yesterday and i've just had a really bad case of writers block!

Well I think that you who have read this will like it better than the first chapter.

Thank you all to my readers and Please ANY FEEDBACK IS APPRECIATED AND ENCOURAGED BY ANYONE WHO READS THIS!

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