Hi, I'm tyler ;p I kind of love to write so I'm just trying to see if I get good feedback on this story so here I go, please write back to give me correction on anything or if I should keep going :) I type fast so you might see one or two errors
k, here I go.
The light shinned in my eyes, it was so strange. I was in my egg and all I could see was a giant fish swimming under me and a deep deep tank. I soon saw all my brothers and sisters falling down and swimming with the big fish. Apprently, that fish was my dad. WOW his colors were amazing, bright turquoise body with gorgeous red & violet fins flowing like drapes in the spring. The tank I was in was huge; I thought if I came out of my nest, I'd fall and never get back up. My father looked up at me as if he was the waiting for me to come down with the rest of my siblings. So with a deep breath and eyes wide open i shot down with my heart racing. finally I was out and I took my first swam. It was wonderful, my siblings and I stayed at the top playing and chasing each other. My father would always swim to the bottom of the tank. He never harmed us, he would always swim around. That night we stayed up at the top as our owner shut off the sunlight.
When I woke up I was in shock, my father was gone. All my siblings swam around looking for him; My siblings slowly started swiming to the bottom of the tank. All I could see was plants and giant caves, it looked so fun so I chose to swim down with my sister, we'd always swim and play together. The huge moss kept us warm and happy at night. Weeks pasted and some of my brothers and sisters either died or got took out of the take. It was so many of us so we never realized; But after a while things started to get pretty weird, my brothers and sisters started to show their gorgeous colours, it amazed me at sometimes. I never knew what mine was but some of my brothers flared at me, I didn't know what they were doing until my older brother started following me. I thought he was chasing me until he started biting me, I was so scared. I think we did this for about 5 minutes and then he stopped, I hid in my cave with other small or bruised siblings who were just as scared as I was.
Things went from bad to worse in the tank and it became survival of the fittest. One of my pale siblings who I always hid under the cave with and felt safe around one day looked out for food, then he never came back. I saw my owner pick him up with a giant green thing and take him to this bright room. I cried that night and I knew if i went out their I would die too. One day my owner took everything out, all the plants, the caves everything, we all ran and swam everywhere, so many dead fish came from the caves it scared me. My owner took us out one by one and placed us in little containers. They were big enough for us to swim back and fourth but it had no light, no caves or anything. I was scared and All I could see was all my siblings placed in their own containers. That night I sat at the bottom of the empty container and slept, I had nightmares of being in the tank again with my siblings chasing after me wanting to kill me. I woke up to my container being lifted and I was shipped in a very small container with hundred of other fish. I saw so many other fish flaring up at me and I didn't want to get killed so for the first time ever I flared back at the two males besides me, they were terrified; they stopped flaring and sat at the bottom of the container. A man that looked like my owner pointed at me and said, "Hes flawless". The man was going to take me but the giant thing I was in drove off. Hours later I was placed in a petstore I think. I was on a shelf with so many other fish.
I was so scared, everyday people would go past me and I didn't know what they wanted so I hid on the bottom. Days turned into weeks and soon I was starting to get really hungry, my container was dirty. It had food that those scary people dropped in only once every other week which tasted disgusting. My water was getting cloudy and it burned my eyes. sometimes I would just sit and wonder, "What did I ever do to deserve this?"
I would cry and sit for days. Till one day a giant man picked up my container and put it in the light, He had dark glasses on and took me with him, I was so happy. I thought I could finally get to a clean nice big tank like the one I was in when I was a fry. But the place i was going made me want to never ever leave that petshop AGAIN..
so I know it was LONG, lol but please tell me do you like it? :o and should I continue or leave it like that haha. It was a giant paragraph so I made it smaller. feed back please C: