Help with school paper - Page 2 - Betta Fish and Betta Fish Care
Like Tree9Likes
LinkBack Thread Tools
post #11 of 11 (permalink) Old 08-07-2017, 09:44 AM
moodynarwhal's Avatar
Join Date: Mar 2016
Location: My house
Posts: 939
I like it! I just noticed a few typos, I will list them and this constructive criticism, I'm not trying to nitpick or anything!
In the first sentence, I think you meant 'are known' instead of 'a known' (I'm sure it's just a typo!) and 'elaborant' is actually spelled 'elaborate'. I think the parenthesis is probably unnecessary, as you already stated that bettas need 2.5 'per fish.' It will flow better without the added statement and you've already stated the needed info. In the sentence after, you just need an 'and' between 'fish' and 'need.' In the last sentence or the next one you write, I would describe briefly how to make sure your decor is safe. Overall, I think It's a great start to your article and I can't wait to see the rest!

Meet me and my fish in my (somewhat neglected) journal:

Custom Crochet/Amigurumi bettas for sale! Black Friday/Cyber Monday $5 dollars off!
moodynarwhal is offline  
The Following User Says Thank You to moodynarwhal For This Useful Post:
AmazingBettas (08-08-2017)
Sponsored Links

ideas , paper

Quick Reply

Register Now

In order to be able to post messages on the Betta Fish and Betta Fish Care forums, you must first register.
Please enter your desired user name, your email address and other required details in the form below.

User Name:
Please enter a password for your user account. Note that passwords are case-sensitive.


Confirm Password:
Email Address
Please enter a valid email address for yourself.

Email Address:


Thread Tools
Show Printable Version Show Printable Version
Email this Page Email this Page

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
Any ideas for my English paper it's Cause and Effect paper jadaBlu The Lounge 2 08-01-2013 05:10 PM
Need someone to interview for a school paper AyalaCookiejar The Lounge 1 03-27-2013 05:35 AM
Betta behavior paper Josh Young Betta Chat 0 05-25-2010 10:44 AM

Posting Rules  
You may post new threads
You may post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On

Powered by vBadvanced CMPS v3.2.3
For the best viewing experience please update your browser to Google Chrome